Siren Waves

Siren Waves

1 chapter / 2410 words

Approximately 12 minutes to read


Cover: Spirit of Flight by Josephine Wall
(This is my NaNoWriMo novel. I got about halfway to the goal in November and have almost finished it. I'll have a chance to post more soon.)
Felissa is a siren on an island isolated from the rest of the world. But she's different from the others in her tribe- she begins to realize that killing humans is wrong, despite the way she was raised. So when a sailor crashes, she has no choice but to help him survive. Hiding him from the tribe will be more difficult than she imagined.


Fantasy, Romance



over 4 years ago Tina Kia said:

Wow I love the dystopic theme to it. It reminded me of The Giver but you did something very original with it, throwing in cliches that go well with the story. Good job!


over 4 years ago D. Claire said:

I've never read a story like this before! Great work


over 4 years ago PriyaKS said:

I loved it! It's very interesting to hear a story about sirens; you don't seem to come across many of those stories, so it made a refreshing change! I loved your descriptions and your main character, but there was quite a bit more telling than showing. Otherwise, great job!


over 4 years ago Christina said:

I liked the idea of having sirens as the center of this piece, but it just drifts without much happening. I found my attention drifting. I want more action upfront. Also, there are odd places in the text where you use "I" or "me" when there doesn't seem to really be a narrator otherwise. I'm wondering if this started in first person and you edited it to become third person? Just make sure you stay consistent. Good start.



almost 5 years ago M.H. said:

Another NaNo project! I've always wanted to take it on, but haven't yet. You're a brave soul to do so.

Anyways, I like the way you've started this with sirens. I don't read a whole lot about them, so this was particularly enjoyable. You do a nice job making sure your readers can tell what everything looks like and how it all works. Of course, some of it does seem extra-telling, and I think you could do with a little more showing, but you're off to a good start. Also, I was wondering about the names of your characters. They're all wonderful, but "Felissa" is very fantasy-like, while the other names are actual simple objects and descriptions. I would recommend mixing that up just a bit.

Good start so far! This seems to have plenty of potential, and I encourage you to continue this. :)