Mercy's Fall

Mercy's Fall

3 chapters / 4565 words

Approximately 23 minutes to read

Description:

Completely new content! All critiques are welcome.

Genres:

Writing, Fantasy, Novel

Comments(21)

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almost 3 years ago MichelleWeber777 said:

I enjoyed this. Pierce is the bad ass you love to hate and love again. I can feel his attitude coming through. Can't wait to read more..

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about 3 years ago Avalon Nightwick said:

I absolutely love Pierce. He's kind of a bad ass and you can tell he's really a man-of-action sort of guy. Your descriptions were strong and quite vivid but sometimes I felt like it was a bit too much.

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about 3 years ago Broken_Angel1024 said:

I like it, it is a very good story and very descriptive. You can imagine what is going on when you are describing it. There is some kind of panic when you read about how a strange basket appears and how the priest is acting. You want to know what it is just the way you described it just because of how you had the priest acting. Over all it was a good story and I liked reading it.

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over 3 years ago Lorelle Shorten said:

This is good. I like the details you included as it really set the scene and made the character feel more real. It's quite mysterious and I'm not sure of the direction you're going to take this story which makes it more intriguing. So far, good job :)

Reviews(19)

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over 1 year ago Baird Wahlander said:

Oh man oh man. I absolutely love this and I cannot wait to see where this is going! You're very descriptive and you've definitely done your homework when it comes to the church and psychology. I did notice a couple of spelling mistakes so you may wanna give this another once-around. Looking forward to more chapters!

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almost 3 years ago MichelleWeber777 said:

This piece from the start it draws you in. No, it isn't the normal start of a story but that is what makes it unique. Every piece an author writes whether poetry to horror stories and all in between should have their own flair and unique grab for the reader. No story ever pleases everyone but a good story will have that element to keep the reader wanting to find out where the author plans on taking their characters or story and this I believe has that. It's a very good start. Keep the energy level up to keep the reader coming back for more...That is the key with this piece. Good job!