1 chapter / 848 words

Approximately 4 minutes to read


Action, Drama, Romance



over 4 years ago avery hates bands said:

Oh my gosh this is beautiful...The writing I mean.Is this a true story love? If it is I want to give you a hug, but I can also promise that things will get better, or at least a little.Don't ask me how I know,because you don't want to hear me rant, but I know they will.Stay strong love, and keep writing


almost 5 years ago loser lost at sea said:

my only problem with this was that the dialogue was unrealistic and the plot was sorta vague. but the description was pretty swell


almost 5 years ago Sharlynn said:

I loved this! I read the first line and couldn't stop! Amazing job

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almost 5 years ago Ashley said:

i love it! its really good. i love how dramatic it is, i was hooked at the first sentence.


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almost 5 years ago Laura May said:

It's a good story, really deep when it comes to the amount of pain she's feeling. I have a couple of comments thought. Second paragraph, you say that you got up to go to the bathroom, and then that she struggled to the bathroom. That seems like it skips back a bit and interrupts the flow. When it begins talking about mark, near the end of that big paragraph it should be "who is always around her" Not which.

Next paragraph, he knew something was definitely wrong, not knows something was wrong definitely.

I liked the dialog, it almost felt like they were devolving into a song. It was awesome.