Sitting Cold (not finished)

Sitting Cold (not finished)

1 chapter / 680 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read

Description:

Its about a girl who was abandoned and lives with nothing.

Genres:

Writing, Adventure, Drama

Comments(14)

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over 4 years ago Megan Molnar said:

Your first line totally hooked me! I caught a spelling error...I think..."anything to relive her from this hell." Don't you mean RELIEVE?? Other than that I liked it. Keep writing :)

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over 4 years ago Abby Ruth said:

seems interesting... there were some comma mistakes and other grammar issues that kind of distracted me. the ending was confusing, and i know you're not done yet, so maybe it's supposed to be. i love the whole mood of this story. i don't even know how to describe it, but the way you wrote it just made me want to keep reading. great job.

Me with curly hair

over 4 years ago Lily Thomas said:

("now..") needs to be capitalized. :) Only thing I saw  that needs fixing. Think this could be a really good story! :)

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over 4 years ago Drew said:

I'm not sure I really got this. The concept was good, I just found it all rather boring. You do a lot of telling but no showing. I would have liked to know more about this voice and the ending was very confusing. I hope you will elaborate more!

Reviews(5)

Young girl and her dragon

over 4 years ago Amber Rain said:

This is certainly an original concept ^-^. I love it. I noticed the use of epimone--repetition of a phrase or clause that emphasizes it--and imagery ^-^. great job.

Black-be-rabbit

over 4 years ago TartyBeaRabbit ◕。◕ said:

Whoa. Awesome!