Fading (extended version)

Fading (extended version)

6 chapters / 4052 words

Approximately 20 minutes to read


Note: I don't wanna get rid of the other version, because of the amazing comments, but I'm gonna use this one as my updated one, because I don't wanna delete this one either xD
I realize there might be a lot wrong with the newest addition, but it's been written for a while and it's been reviewed, and I can't figure out how to make it sound any better, so I'm just publishing it now xD


Fantasy, Romance, Novel



almost 4 years ago Emma Yeager-Chael said:

I loved it! keep going! And please tell me when you do

Book cover

about 4 years ago CrazyCana said:

This adds the unknown details to the contest version. How she died, etc. Great!


over 4 years ago Luna Castle said:

Mostly because I loved it, but also the cliff hanger. I like how you ended the section like that though, because of the suspense it created.


over 4 years ago Luna Castle said:

of course!!!


James henry matthews the second's portrait

over 4 years ago Lexi said:

This is really good and I enjoyed the read! Please keep writing! I could easily picture what was going on in my mind. Here's a suggestion for you, switch POV's soon so we can get a look at HIS personality and what he's thinking. It would help give depth to him and make him seem real. I like this whole thing and I love the last line in chapter 4 "I've been waiting for you Anastacia" (can't spell her name, lol). Overall, great job and I can't wait to read more! :)


over 4 years ago Olivia Williams said:

I like the idea of this, it's pretty unique, and that's saying something. I'm not exactly sure how the whole falling in love thing would happen, but I'm assuming you will explain it later. I enjoyed the kind of mystery to it. Only thing I would say is that some of your sentences were a bit on the awkward side. But anyways, great job!