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6 chapters / 938 words

Approximately 5 minutes to read

Description:

[WORK IN PROGRESS] sometimes we wish too hard, and later on it hurts. {check: pinterest}

Genres:

Drama, Romance, Serial
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Comments(102)

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over 1 year ago Eva Marie said:

I can't wait for you to get back to this story! I have so much emotion already invested in these characters...

I believe in her

about 2 years ago Tate Thurgood (KONY 2012) said:

The new chapters are so wonderful! You've kept up with all the amazing stuff I talked about earlier. I love how even as you revealed the wish, you did it subtly so that the reader can come to it on their own instead of being force-fed it. I'm really excited to read more, especially with the ominous feeling hovering over the hopefulness. Write more soon! :D

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about 2 years ago Christina Im said:

Ohh my goodness. These new updates have left me absolutely gutted. They're gorgeous and lovely. And ugh, I love Tom and Althea so much. They make my heart feel sticky-sweet in the best way.

(But what is this ominous note you've left things off on? Hmm.)

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about 2 years ago Abby Elise Duke said:

I like the changes you've made to this, how the start of the story is altered. There's more emotion and desperation, which gives us more of a connection with and heart for the characters.

So... yeah. Please keep going.

Reviews(12)

I believe in her

about 2 years ago Tate Thurgood (KONY 2012) said:

This is such an incredible piece! I'm assuming you're continuing it, which makes me giddy with excitement. I love the unique capitalization; in most stories a lack of this would be annoying but in this story it somehow makes me more intrigued. Your word choice is superb and thank you thank you THANK YOU for giving out hints about the wish instead of dumping it on us.

I'm head over heels in love with this. I will definitely be back looking for more. :D So please, keep writing this! It really is incredible!!!

-Tate

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almost 3 years ago Linda D said:

There is a mystery here – she is gathering things for luck – and there is a lump in her throat, obviously she’s nervous, but she’s smiling too; she’s excited – you don’t need to tell WHAT she’s nervous/excited about, but perhaps just a tease to the mystery – your hook.

Althea would need all the luck she could gather if she wanted to accomplish this daring feat. – something like that for a hook

“…of her dungarees (contained) a limp… - getting rid of the slow “were”