The Park Bench

The Park Bench

1 chapter / 1200 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read

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Finalist in First Love Contest - 1200 word limit.

"You don’t deserve this. No one deserves this kind of pain, and I can’t see you like this."

Aubrey is different from the others, but Nate can't seem to put his finger on why she's different. Turns out, it's more serious than he could have ever imagined.

This elegant cover was made by Ava H. C.

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over 2 years ago Hazel Nethershine said:

I love it! It had me hooked the minute I started reading.

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about 4 years ago Gabrielle Fiona Oswin said:

Wow, that's really sweet

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over 4 years ago Kaitie Lysaght said:

This was sweet. It makes sence how these two would both attract and react to each other. There are parts that move fast, the ending is a bit abrupt, but that's likely because of the word limit, and for that number it actually fits a lot into the story. Glad it did well in the contest. :)

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over 4 years ago Rosemary Yin said:

I loved this story!! It was suspenseful, and I never knew what end was coming. Great job. :)

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over 4 years ago Dains said:

Wow. Where do I begin?

The characters' emotions were so real, it seemed like I was living the story out as Nate trying to comfort Aubrey. There wasn't any attempt to hide the grisly reality of how life is for some kids in the world, where these children run away from home because they can't take being in their homes anymore due to their parents. And the sudden twist right at the end was great. You could slightly tell that something was up when Nate thought about the kiss not being a "real" one, which made the results all the greater.

(One small error I think I noticed, though, was when you wrote "...taking its affect me...". I believe that that should be "..taking its effect on me..", but I could be wrong.)

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over 4 years ago Cassandra E. W. said:

I love this story! Your idea was very original and the plot flowed well throughout the story. You kept the reader hooked and got the emotions turning. I liked your characters, and their problems were made very real by your writing. Over all, this rocked.

Cassandra E. W.

P.S. I love your cover!