A Folded Letter and a Broken Heart

A Folded Letter and a Broken Heart

2 chapters / 4518 words

Approximately 23 minutes to read

Description:

How do you recover from a pain so deep it sears your soul and eats at you? How do you cope with the guilt of knowing the pain so many are feeling is your fault?
Jess doesn't. She runs from her pain and anger and for two years no one hears from her then suddenly, she returns home and turns the quite town of Gig Harbor into a riot of gossip and old memories.

Genres:

Writing, Romance, Novel

Comments(6)

Theoneandonly

over 4 years ago Lee Ryder said:

I was hooked. I wanted to know what the back story was as much as I wanted to know what was going to happen next. This earns more hearts!!

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over 4 years ago Hosanna Hope Boesche said:

This is so sad! My tow sisters are out of state, one moved last Spring and the other moved in the Fall, and I miss them so much it hurts. I can't even comprehend how it would feel to not even know if your sibling was alive or not, let alone for them to come home. Very good job.

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over 4 years ago Melanie Preston said:

I really love the format of this story. Nicely done!

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over 4 years ago J. Li said:

This was an amazing piece of work! Overall, the story was well designed and planned, so the plot was smooth and clear to understand. The story was very cute because of the descriptions of the characters and how you revealed the narrator's inner thoughts and feelings. The only suggestion I have to make is to consider italicizing the letter at the beginning, to let the reader to know that this is a special start to the story.

Excellent job!

Reviews(5)

Anastasia

over 4 years ago Caroline Kamm said:

First, I must compliment you on your use of style. By that I mean that the mood, the descriptions, your sentence structure, everything fit into a very intimate scene. It felt like I was 'there'. It also seems to fit into a realistic, credible plot. The only advice I have to offer is on your characters. Right now, nothing really distinguishes your characters by chapter 2 other than their positions. Make something unique about them that penetrates their being fully. You should be able to feel their character in all their actions and words. Do not make them plot-fillers, things you put in simply because they 'should' be there. Make them deep, so that if you had to write different novels on each of them, they would be interesting enough to stand on their own. Overall, I am very impressed and encourage you to keep writing!

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over 4 years ago Sebastian Matthew said:

I really loved this book! The romance was a nice touch and I read it twice I loved it so much! The quilt part was beautiful! Really good job!