1 chapter / 246 words

Approximately 1 minute to read


My entry for "The Spring Fever Short-Story Contest."



over 4 years ago Jackie Chappell said:

very good!


over 4 years ago Breezy Zins said:

Wow! This is beautiful. I love the description in the first paragraph(: Fantastic job, amazing imagery. Good luck in the contest!


over 4 years ago THE GOD OF CAKE said:

Wow. This was a beautiful piece. It was so sad but amazingly written--good job!


over 4 years ago Tanya K. said:

Wonderful! It had beautiful descriptions and details that really created an image in the readers mind. It also seemed real and peaceful. I loved your beginning paragraph, because that really got me wanting reading more. Keep up the GREAT WORK! :)



over 4 years ago The Author of Darkness said:

I hate word limits. I feel like there's so much more that could be done with this story. Maybe more backstory about the girl and the girl's mother. If you expanded it, it would be an amazing story.

Michael at 5 and a half

over 4 years ago C.L. Rosecrans said:

I like it especially since I lost my mother to that horrid disease. I would enjoy seeing you fill it out a bit more. Well done.