Finding Trouble (SCIL #5)

Finding Trouble (SCIL #5)

20 chapters / 36555 words

Approximately about 3 hours to read

Description:

Sequel to Lies Up in Lights. COMPLETE.

On New Year’s Eve of 2016, instead of being at a party with Anthony, her ex-fiancé, Paris watches Kaden die after finding him injured in his London apartment. She’s left with only a few clues — that Chloe has something to do with it, and two white envelopes she’s seen containing threatening notes signed with the name “Trouble”.

As accusations fly, the tabloids slave over finding the truth - whatever it is - and relationships are put to the test, Paris realizes that Trouble isn't stopping with the death of Kaden, and is desperate to cover up his/her identity at whatever cost. But Paris, to her knowledge, is the only person who knows of the existence of Trouble — marking her, unless she can stop Trouble first.

After all, someone who's already murdered once wouldn't be so averse to doing it again.

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Cover photos from https://www.flickr.com/photos/zappowbang/,https://www.flickr.com/photos/67923089@N00. Liscence: http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/2.0/

"First" draft started March 12 2014/Reached 10k March 22/Reached 15k April 9/Reached 20k April 21st/Reached 25k April 25th/Reached 30k May 9th/First draft complete May 9th

Second draft started July 29th 2015/Reached 10k July 30th/Reached 20k August 1st/Reached 30k August 9th/Passed original word count August 9th/Second draft complete August 20th

Genres:

Romance, Novel, Mystery

Comments(172)

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almost 2 years ago Selena Brooks said:

Ch. 2: ok, Amelia is being a *little* rude considering she's at Kaden's funeral. And should I be feeling a little bad for Kaden? I mean, I sort of think he did want to change.

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almost 2 years ago C.R. Chamberlain said:

EXPLAIN TO ME WHY CHLOE IS SO SELFISH

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almost 2 years ago Selena Brooks said:

Read the first chapter. So many emotions, oh my goodness.

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almost 2 years ago C.R. Chamberlain said:

absolutely loving reading this again!

Reviews(1)

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over 3 years ago Abigail Taylor said:

I think you have a great start to a story here. You seem to know where you're going and how you're getting there. I'm not sure you know your characters very well. It my just be your narration style, but sometimes it seems that your characters aren't themselves, and at other times, you stick to two or three characteristics and labor over them. Make sure character development is slow but steady.

You're a "tell-er" instead of a "show-er". That might work for this piece of writing, but be careful that you don't always flat-out tell us "I was", "she was", "he is", "I am". Instead of saying "I was scared", go instead with "I felt a thin sheen of sweat break out on my palms."

But this is a great start. I certainly hope you can see this through to the end, and that you can polish it to its full potential. You're doing excellent!