13 chapters / 22291 words

Approximately about 2 hours to read


Through my sixteen years, I've only had one thing that set me apart from the others- the fact that I was born with white hair, the total opposite of every other person in my village. I was never told what consequences my difference would have, I was only left with the knowledge to keep it secret, or else face whatever would become of people finding out. And with the ever-important Trials approaching my doorstep, different things start to take precedence over secrecy and I am threatened with the possibility of someone finding out, and with that, the choice between keeping the very thing that sets me apart in a way that will condemn me forever a secret and venturing out to set myself apart in a way that will make me honored forever.



over 4 years ago Mattea Black said:

I love it! I only read the first few chapters, but what I did read was really easy to follow. Please, keep writing! :)


over 5 years ago Maas said:

HEY! What's the big idea leaving us in the middle of a romatic scene like that?! You are such a tease its not even funny! Finish this! Please

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over 5 years ago Brianna Richards said:

I'm sorry it took me so long to get around to reading this but I did and I was completely enamored with it. It's just brilliant, I love it !

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over 5 years ago Rae Solo said:

Wow, it's been awhile! Okay, I don't remember if I read this before or not, so I decided to start over.

Okay, I've only read the prologue so far, but it's definitely interesting. I plan to read more as I have time, but I'm in class most days right now, so it might be a bit sporadic. And I have a lot of people to catch up with, so it'll take some time.

Bear with me, okay?

Good work so far!



almost 6 years ago Act said:

On one hand, this wasn't that well written. Citrine is a serious sue, and it's utterly predictable. On the other hand, I just read the whole thing.

On one hand, it's a pretty shameless takeoff on the Hunger Games mixed with The Giver. On the other hand, I find the premise intriguing.

It's pretty solid as YA. There's not much to it but what's on the surface, but if you don't think about it too hard, it works.

It's not up to the standard I usually hold things to in order to heart them or feature them, but I'll keep an eye on it. Maybe it will surprise me.


almost 6 years ago ethereality said:

Great job! They say not to judge a book by its cover, but yours sure drew me in. I actually found it bookmarked on my school computer, and I have no clue how long it's been there--but I started reading it and couldn't stop! :) Great theme! Like somebody else said (don't remember who) it reminds me a bit of the Hunger Games. Also sort of mixed with Finding Blue. (Which isn't a popular book, and I honestly have no clue how I remembered the name of it. xD) As for my views, opinions, and impressions: I like the characters. They're easily distinctive, and I liked Leevy from the start. The protagonist is also easy to relate with--she's got a great personality that really attracts readers. The person below me mentioned the phrase "information dump", which I'm pretty familiar with. I saw slightly what she was talking about, but I found myself enjoying more details. You didn't write like a bore, as some writers do when they try to convey data, but instead you held my attention. I hung onto your words, trying to absorb everything I could. I admit, I would be a little confused if those parts weren't there. If you want to satisfy those others who disagree with me though, you could try just spreading those parts out. The plot is very interesting! It seems pretty deep. I am writing a dystopian novel myself, and I understand how difficult it is to create a whole new world of your own. The entire framework consists of your imagination, and we all know that finicky little worm never likes to cooperate. ;) But you do very well with it! Good job. At the start I was curious if Erius would be Cetrine's love interest, but I'm glad it turned out to be Leevy. As I said before, I like him a lot! :) I can sense the approaching conflict, so the best thing I can recommend is to drawwww out the suspense. You know that swelling adrenaline we get from cliffhangers at the end of chapters--it's frustrating, but with a huge grin on our faces and anticipation in our stomachs. Truthfully, we love it. :P I can't wait for the rest! Excellent job!