Our Last

Our Last

1 chapter / 544 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read


"Never thought we'd have a last kiss..."

Quotes from: "Think of Me" - The Phantom of the Opera
"Last Kiss" - Taylor Swift
"Tinker Bell" - Hook



over 4 years ago Yasmine Fields said:

This made me want to cry, so many emotions in it


over 4 years ago Katrina Summers said:

I have chills after reading this. This was absolutely amazing!



over 4 years ago Cait Cher said:

I have a few things about grammar.

Remove the comma from between "room" and "and".

"Stupid, smiling face [comma removed] and that annoying, beautiful, bright radiance..."

"...the kiss [comma removed] though."

"...everyone [comma removed] if you're..."

"...beauty [comma removed] and tell them again."

Otherwise, this is tear jerking. I love how your main character told Tristan to do all of these things for her. To be honest, I would do the same thing. Very excellent job.


over 4 years ago Garima Gupta said:

Oh, I forgot to add one thing I found:

"It pays better - much better - and what will help us support ourselves." - I think what should be that.