The Great Races

The Great Races

18 chapters / 32867 words

Approximately about 3 hours to read

Description:

© THIS IS MY OWN CONTENT AND IT IS NOW COPYWRIGHTED

Cela Maddox is one of the many involved in the feud between the Great Races. She doesn't believe that a simple teenage girl can change the outcome of an entire war, but with the help of some very unlikely friends, she finds that the task will not be as impossible... but it will most certainly not be easy. As they venture together into the unknown they find secrets that are best left buried, find some interesting facts about their future, meet dangerous people, and form a bond that goes much deeper than any ordinary friendship.
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there is a poem by kit devine that was inspired by this novel's prologue. you should definitely go check it out! :D i'm pretty sure it's called the war has begun, but just go to her page anyways. she's really great.

Genres:

Adventure, Fantasy, Novel

Comments(53)

Gothic_girls133

almost 6 years ago NoOne said:

wooo! I loved it! :D

-Please I would really appreciate if you would read some of my poems. They are all based on real events of my life and I write them to let my feelings out. If you have time please read one or two and comment. Thank you very much.

Gothic_girls133

almost 6 years ago NoOne said:

wooo! I loved it! :D

-Please I would really appreciate if you would read some of my poems. They are all based on real events of my life and I write them to let my feelings out. If you have time please read one or two and comment. Thank you very much.

Gothic_girls133

almost 6 years ago NoOne said:

wooo! I loved it! :D

-Please I would really appreciate if you would read some of my poems. They are all based on real events of my life and I write them to let my feelings out. If you have time please read one or two and comment. Thank you very much.

Idkk

about 6 years ago ~*Dana*~ said:

I liked it! I'm afraid I didn't have 2 hours to read it all, so I only read the first few chapters, and I don't have much critisim. It was good, from what I've read. :) Nice job

Reviews(5)

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over 6 years ago Jessyka Bourbeau said:

Wow! This is a really interesting beginning to this story. Your descriptions are wonderful and I can picture everything very clearly. I'm not sure if I like the name Ulantos, but that's just me being picky with names as I always am. I love Cela's character-- she's so interesting and cool. One thing you need to watch out for though is your word usage: I've noticed you use the same words a LOT in only a few paragraphs. Read your writing out loud and if it sounds weird with the same word repeated so many times, crack open a thesaurus and you'll be amazed at how much better your writing flows :) (It's something I have to do ALL the time).

Good work here and I'll most certainly be coming back to read more :)

(Can you read Into the Woods for our swap?)

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over 6 years ago Roberta H. Shapiro said:

I am going to write things as I come across them. 1. The imagery/descriptive language is amazing and adds a lot to the story. 2. "He jogged off to write the message and hand it off to a messenger." The root word "message" is used too often. 3. "'They live in the forests of the southeast, living primitively.'" The root word "live" is overused. 4. "Her mother's smiles were almost magic." The word "almost" interferes with the meaning a bit. Try replacing it with "like" or removing it in general. 5. "They lit up the room and made everyone else want to grin at least." This would flow better if it were, "They lit up the room and made everyone else want to grin, too." 6. That was all I could find for quite a few chapters. Your grammar is MUCH better than the other stories I have read. Great job!