2 chapters / 347 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read


(Winner of the Loop Challenge!!!)(Thanks so much guys!!!)XD
What if your life was a mirage?



over 4 years ago Linda Dionne said:

This is a great piece. It's mysterious yet we know enough to be interested.

Black bird

over 4 years ago Aviline said:

Wow! I love the flash fiction piece in general, but you made it better with your editing! Congrats on winning!


over 4 years ago Patty Pimperstin said:

Hearted yours! & best of luck in your contest! If you want to swap, please check out my story, "Gills," on my page & heart it if you like it! :)

Bad touch trio

over 4 years ago Sierra said:

This was really good! It was good when you cut the story words down as well- which means you know what to keep to make sure the story still flows. I can give you kudos for that! :D



over 4 years ago Ella Black said:

I must admit, this is a very good story! But what I've noticed, is that you use the word, "and" quite a bit. I, as the reader, wanted to learn more about the man she was engaged to. There was this one part, "I couldn't get it of[.] Trust me, I tried." Instead of the comma, I would have used a period. Why? Because it's to emphasize the "Trust me" part. But I truly thought the story was great. I absolutely loved how you compared her to a bird trapped in a cage.

Loved it.