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1 chapter / 1200 words

Approximately 6 minutes to read

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[RUNNER-UP IN THE WHAT IF? CONTEST]

"What if all your dreams came true?"

Cover made by Lina Williams!

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almost 4 years ago ambi said:

I love this! The last sentence is so true and it fits perfectly in this wondrous web of imagination you've weaved to make this story. It was well worth the Heart! Great work!

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about 4 years ago buchanannanananana barnes said:

That last sentence. Those last few words. Those hit me like a ton of bricks, because they're true. We think of dreams and nightmares as separate entities, but they are the same thing, the EXACT same thing. They are just interpreted differently. We dream about a spider (my greatest fear) and we associate it with pain, suffering, terror. We dream about a sunny day and we associate it with love, happiness, joy. Your writing embodies this.

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about 4 years ago Hillary Holloway said:

This is very well-written. I like that you make the reader the antagonist.

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about 4 years ago S. Morales said:

You're writing is amazing. I really loved this story!

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almost 5 years ago C. Reese said:

I love it. Beautiful descriptions, wonderful plot. Will you write more? And, this is my end of the swap from months ago. I'm so sorry that I'm late at this... Please do continue.

~C. Reese

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about 4 years ago Anna M. Watson said:

Good start. I'm curious as to who this Dreamweaver is.

"like a moth" - good image

"beyond human, beyond average" - I would switch the order of these phrases. Average first, human second. It escalates instead of de-escalates.

Totally saw the end of that one coming. "If all your dreams could come true..." NO. I wouldn't want that. Not at all. Good story. Good ending. One thing I almost wished happened was that your character would wake up right at the very end and realize the Dreamweaver was a dream too. But then maybe have them see something in their room that makes them wonder if it was actually real. Just to keep your readers on their toes. Totally up to you. I just thought it would be cool.