Blah! Blah! Blah!

Blah! Blah! Blah!

1 chapter / 1740 words

Approximately 9 minutes to read

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I am Hayley and I just have these little thoughts while I was in my Physics class :)

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over 4 years ago Anorexic said:

This was a very relative story, and I can see a few others in the comments have pointed that out! haha, this is a very different way to write a story, and I do say I was a bit confused at some points, but besides that it was an easy read :3 Also I saw a few grammar mistakes, but reading through it and checking over should help you fix the, :)

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over 4 years ago Emma J said:

A lot of the things you said were really similar to me! I really loved what you wrote. Thanks!

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over 4 years ago M.H. said:

I'm not entirely sure how I feel about the rambling tone of the piece. It made it hard for my to connect with your MC. In addition, she sounded a bit whiny and self-righteous, which put me off. However, I like the topics she seems to address in her head, and think that it's a pretty good piece. :)

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over 4 years ago Emi B said:

Very well written. You have a strong voice.

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over 4 years ago Lily Chen said:

There were a few grammar/spelling errors here and there. Also, I don't think Physics should be capitalized, especially since it's just an adjective for the teacher. There were some instances where you combined two words together to form one, when it should be two. In some parts, you did a lot of telling and not showing. I understand that in the italicized parts, she's telling us about her thoughts, opinions, etc. but it seemed a little awkward with just telling. But other than that, I enjoyed the flow and setting of your story. The physics class served as an ideal backdrop for Hayley's thoughts and ramblings. Good job, and keep writing!

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over 4 years ago H.M. Marie said:

Again as most people said there were a few grammar errors and things like that, but it was really good! I thought it was incredibly relatable and easy to read! *JaneThummler*