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InkHaiku entry. A haiku about loneliness.


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over 4 years ago Deegan Miller said:

I suck at Haiku's but you get the point clearly and beautifully. Only talented people can.


over 4 years ago Coralina Liew said:

Your poem was simple yet accurate on so many levels! I love how you described loneliness perfectly, with so much emotion. I would recommend, though, that 'black' was replaced by something else. Loneliness isn't necessarily black, after all - I would envision it as a dull, unemotional shade of ashy grey. It's different for everyone, I guess.

Keep writing! :)



over 4 years ago Margaret Zhang said:

Wow, love your word choice for the first and second line. The third line seems a little generic compared to the first two, but overall, this is an amazing haiku. Great job. Hope you win for the contest.


over 4 years ago M.H. said:

I decided to take and read this because some of the haikus have been lovely, and this was quite well done. :) You didn't use "lonely" or any variation in the poem itself (even though it is in the title), and that's great to see. I love it when people can write a piece without using the prompt's wording in any way. Amazing work. ^^



almost 4 years ago Avalon Nightwick said:

I'm so glad this already has a decent amount of hearts because it is excellent. Haiku's are difficult to write due to the 5-7-5 rule, so it can be difficult to elicit emotion from so few words, but you sent a shiver down my spine at the end :) I was also impressed that were able to incorporate longer words such as abyssal and agonizing.