This is my Aka

This is my Aka

1 chapter / 930 words

Approximately 5 minutes to read


My entry for the Coming of Age contest. Please give feedback of all kinds.


Writing, Fantasy


Gina mialma figment

over 4 years ago Gina Mialma said:

I really liked this story, it was well written and or flowed and it felt completed buy at the same time ur could be turned into a full length novel. Really good job.


over 4 years ago Ashlie L said:

This is very good! I like the concept, and your writing style. It flowed well, and had just enough detail. Great work!


over 4 years ago OvercomingDyslexic said:

The setting of this was really vivid and the whole plot was interesting, but I felt like the descriptions were a little too wordy. It slowed down the flow of your story a lot and made it difficult to focus on the plot. But your grammar and spelling was perfect!

Newest me

over 4 years ago Sally Balboa said:

Your MC struck me as a run of the mill kind of guy. Just because their are tons of stories with the same sort of character. However you obviously have a great grasp on grammar, which is always a great thing. Although I think you just had a little too much detail. Great job over all.

-Write well, and often-



over 4 years ago Emily Cates said:

Wow! I really didn't know what to expect from another coming of age piece, but I sure did like this. I really liked the way this story deviated from the norm, just like a couple others that I have read. You did a good job with the overall grammar of the piece, and keeping the reader interested. I really have no complaints. Great job!