The Asylum

The Asylum

5 chapters / 2894 words

Approximately 14 minutes to read


Haha! Nice... it made it to All the Rage apparently. I hadn't visited this site in about a month, so I hadn't known. This is by far my most philosophical story. It's creepy, but I love how it turned out. This is basically everything I've ever pondered at night compiled into a semi-cohesive plot. It's wordy, but bear with me. :D
Btw, translate the French... I hope it still works when it's put through google translate, because it's some of the more interesting stuff in the story.



over 5 years ago s reyes said:

this happens to me a lot... am i crazy? you just think of things that are insane at noon, but as night falls the reminiscence of the light warps the mind at night. it corrects the mind at night.

Pretty flower

over 6 years ago Tapdancer said:

I don't have time now, but I'll come back later to read this. It looks like a really cool piece of writing!


over 6 years ago Miah said:

Wow. You have painted some really descriptive scenes/characters in this. I love the entire concept of getting a peek of some of the people in the asylum; very unique. Keep this up; you have a great writing style! xD


over 6 years ago aaron mitchell said:



Dragon wallpaper

over 6 years ago AndreaKHill said:

'...entire length of [her] cell...'

'...punished [me] because of...'


This is interesting. I like the degradation of the narrator's mind, how the patients tainted his mind. I just wish you gave a better starting point; maybe have the narrator have a more sound mind in the beginning. It would make the degradation more powerful and shocking.

Also, I would be very, very wary of the word 'curable' when it comes to mental disorders, even 'incurable'. A better word is 'treatable'. The misconceptions of psychiatry and the word 'curable' is a dangerous one, and I don't want you to perpetuate them. Just a recommendation.

Otherwise, very well written. Great job!


over 6 years ago aaron mitchell said:

shea savage writes a hauntingly gritty piece that sends trembles through the reader. poised, so precariously, on the edge of madness, beauty, and necessity the narrative tips and wobbles daring the reader to hold on. in harmony with this delicate position, shea savage has intricately woven some masterful references that, in themselves, bring up questions about reality. the result is a literary treat - and an unsettlingly profound exercise in thought