Death Tickles my Funny Bone

Death Tickles my Funny Bone

11 chapters / 32895 words

Approximately about 3 hours to read

Description:

A book is found. Reality is forgotten. I really don't like writing these descriptions.

Comments(15)

Ookami

over 3 years ago Gracie Qu said:

Your introduction was a great way to get a reader's attention, especially the first paragraph about how a book could be so painful. Great writing!

Jayce and me 2

over 3 years ago Britty Kimble said:

I only read a part of the first chapter because my teacher yelled at me, but what i read i liked. ill read the rest whenever i can.

Girl

over 3 years ago Natalie Dunning said:

I only got to read a little bit of this, but I will surely read more when I have the time. Because I really like it so far. You're a really good writer. Good job and keep it up :) Thanks for swapping with me

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over 3 years ago Willow J Flynn said:

I really like this. You have interesting characters, and good detail. I would be a little careful, however. At some points you go a little too far into detail and it gets a little tedious. Mostly I'm referring to when she is getting ready for school and the description of that process. Otherwise, it was really good. I like your MC's personality and the details you've put into her, and the intro really pulled me in.Great job!

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almost 4 years ago Faro di Luce said:

Okay, so I'll start out with the little grammatical errors I noticed: "...sure I cried when I read the endings of my favorite books because I [k]new that the story was over."

"The standard run 500 laps of the track until you can't walk boot camp" I think it would be a little clearer if you wrote it like "run-500-laps-of-the-track-until-you-can't-walk boot camp".

"The doctors always described me as a girl who was somewhere in that gray area of adolescence." - great line!

"...my mother immediately wanted to distance herself from all things that reminded herself of him." --> "from all things that reminded [her] of him."

"Working at the 24/7 really took its toll on her" Perhaps you should explain in the first chapter that "the 24/7" is a convenience store. Just a thought.

"..we'd both take a bullet for each other in a heart beat." I might be wrong, but I'm pretty sure "heartbeat" is one word.

"the fact that no matter how hard I tried I could never escape its greedy clutches." - another great line!

There weren't any major/noticeable errors in the other chapters that I saw (yay!), so great job with that! Okay, so I was pleasantly creeped out when she found the book at her father's grave. I like how you wrote it so simply and nonchalantly, which made it even more mysterious. And I really want Emilia and Mikey to fall in love and live happily ever after lol. Just saying. And that MOM. WOW, she's something else! This is a very interesting and captivating story you have here! Great job and keep writing! :)

Jadegodtier

almost 4 years ago Jade Harley said:

This was totally amazing! You should really write/publish more. Nevertheless, I'll say a few things about this book. First, total props on using heavy metal bands. (Rise Against + Breaking Benjamin + Green Day + A7X + Shinedown = endless