The Demons

The Demons

1 chapter / 990 words

Approximately 5 minutes to read

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Finalist for the runaway contest! I want to congratulate Elizabeth Diedrick for winning the runaway contest with her entry, Hatred! This is my first time trying to write for a contest, and I'm generally not very good when I write off of a prompt. But when I saw this prompt, I immediately thought of this. I hope you like it!

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about 6 years ago krystelle faulkener said:

Whoa, that was intense. One thing though. I think you ought to break up the larger paragraphs into smaller ones so it's easier to read and yeah. :) Late congrats ~

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over 6 years ago Tapdancer said:

I LOVE THIS!

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over 6 years ago Marit Runyon said:

Congratulations with being a finalist for the runaway contest!

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over 6 years ago Naheed Muqeetulla said:

Very well-written. You have a remarkable imagination and the ability to express yourself in a vivid manner. Great work!

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over 6 years ago caroline was here said:

Yes, I agree the end was very sudden. I liked it, though, and it was very unique.

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over 6 years ago Roberta H. Shapiro said:

I like the plot a lot. I found some things that didn't go well though: 1. Some words were misused/misspelled (of/off) 2. Some parts sounded repetitive. 3. NEVER start a sentence with "but" or "and." 4. The ending went a bit fast for me, but I liked the last sentence. Good job!