Broken Wings

Broken Wings

1 chapter / 987 words

Approximately 5 minutes to read

Description:

//Runaway Contest Entry// A Winged girl plots her escape from a so-called orphanage in the hopes of finding her parents.

Comments(2)

Lady_selene

over 6 years ago Lillith Izmorova said:

Thanks! I'm not sure what I'm going to do with it quite yet; this is a very loose adaptation of a dream. I suspect that I'll rework what I have to explain more of what's what... but we'll see when I find the time to get back to it. :)

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over 6 years ago Chaotic Chica said:

I like the uniqueness of the character and I am anxious to see how this progresses!

Reviews(1)

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over 6 years ago LMKirk said:

Interesting, you hint at a much wider dystopia outside the gulag, a war and a political system in turmoil, but in good flash fiction style these are merely hints. I found at times your use of tense to be off, at times use past and present in the same sentence. I would have liked more development of the your protagonist, more from inside her head. I liked the ending with the idea of her wings spread out to the sky.