The Life of a Lily

The Life of a Lily

7 chapters / 13507 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read

Description:

"How far you go in life depends on your being tender with the young, compassionate with the aged, sympathetic with the striving and tolerant of the weak and strong. Because some day in your life you will have been all of these." ~George Washington Carver

Genres:

Writing, Novel

Comments(16)

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over 3 years ago Yuki Phantomhive said:

This is very interesting subject. One of my close friends tried to commit suicide. She failed. Thank god. Anyway~ I think that this was a great! I think you should add a little background at the beginning about her trying to commit suicide. Over all its all very good. ~yuki

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over 3 years ago Lindsey Hazel Allaire said:

Wow, I'm so sorry it took me so long to get back to you. In a way, I am glad I did, because when I first came to read this, it only had one chapter. But now it has four, and I couldn't stop reading. Your character's voice is compelling, and I absolutely loved how you described everything - detail, but not too much detail. I love the character's attitude towards Dr. America. It flowed smoothly and well. I really enjoyed this piece.

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over 3 years ago Pure Innocence said:

I really like this piece. I like how you approached many different ideas. You didn't just focus on one idea of like the Big Bang or God. I really appreciate that because most people are biased. I usually don't like it when people add swearing because it is usually unnecessary. In this piece, though I didn't like it at first, I looked back it and I really think that it added to the affect that this girl was angry with the world. And in a way it complimented the piece. Overall well done I really enjoyed it. Keep on writing.

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over 3 years ago Alex said:

wow, I can honestly say that I was very impressed with your story, I absolutely loved it. It sounded quite like a book that must have been published and I've luckily managed to stumble across it. Well done.

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about 3 years ago Charlie Moloney said:

Hey, just read your first chapter. Very good writing style. Nice and impressionistic. Interesting descriptions of things so I got a real sense of who the narrator was. Only thing I would suggest is to massively shorten it. You could cut almost half of this and your readers would still get the point. I haven't read the other chapters, but a short first chapter might help launch into the action a bit quicker. I really like the characterisation of the narrator though. its great how shes getting therapy but doing all she can to avoid thinking about it. Very real

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over 3 years ago Chantelle Mathewson said:

I read all four chapters that you have up at the moment, and I really liked what you've written. I liked the way you started it with Lilly's pondering of the question "Why are we here?" It set the tone of the story and let us know right off the bat the kind of person she is, as she kept going off on tangents like that throughout the rest of the story. I liked how you stretched the whole session out over the four chapters. Sometimes writing so little of a time over so many chapters can be a bad thing, but here, it worked perfectly. I also loved the therapist. I thought that you gave both of the characters a lot of personality right off the bat.

I really loved the flash back when she was telling the therapist about her mother and father. You could really feel her emotion in it although you also knew that she didn't want to be feeling it.

It made me start thinking, and that's a good thing. It left me with a lot of questions about her life and why she's even here in the first place. Very intriguing way to start a story. I've never read a story like this before. You're very talented. I can't wait to read more.