The Master's Regret

The Master's Regret

1 chapter / 349 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

This story is about the Master who is the Doctor's enemy but who was once his childhood friend, I basically made him a sympathetic character.

Comments(6)

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about 2 years ago Payton M. said:

The content itself was great, but I have to admit, your story would really up its reading ease if you tried to format it more like a book and follow grammatical rules like that. It was a bit difficult to read with the actions being starred and things like that.

Other than that, great job and keep writing! I liked it!

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about 2 years ago Purplehood said:

Wow. This was interesting. I am not a fan of Doctor Who, but I actually enjoyed reading this. I suggest you look over your grammar and the way you word your sentences. At certain times the words didn't flow as well as they could have. But overall, nice job.

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about 2 years ago Colette [Rook] said:

Okay, so my computer glitched before I could leave any constructive feedback. =( Sorry about that.

Like Margaret, I would suggest breaking it up into paragraphs and the way you used the star thingies was a little confusing to me and inconsistent in some places. You were using them to show what he was doing, right? Like *chuckles*? There were some places where an action had only one of those star thingies.

This is a great idea! Keep up the good work!

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about 2 years ago Colette [Rook] said:

I agree with Margaret: I love Doctor Who, although I haven't seen many episodes and only half of one with the Master, but this was a very cool idea. I love reading about something from the bad guy's POV, especially when it makes them more sympathetic.

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almost 2 years ago Trin Aster said:

(BTW I am a huge doctor who fan!!)

I think you meant Tardis, not tardais, if you are talking about doctor who. Also don't forget the periods, commas and I forgot the name for "". Also instead of using the stars, how about showing that he is angry, like making his hand slam down onto the table. "I WAS EIGHT YEARS OLD(,) THEY SHOULD HAVE (KNOWN) THE CONSEQUENCES..." a few examples of some stuff that needs to be fixed.

"I am a Lord (of) time." it should be a of not a or.

A few other things.

But a more positive note: I love how you portray the master, I have always loved his character, you did a lovely job on the emotions he was feeling. I am super happy I picked this piece. Great great job!

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over 2 years ago carlie stanco said:

Thank you so much!^^ I usually use the star thing for povs or a certain action constructive criticism is much appreciated