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If you have ideas, tell me!! Any plot twist, Couples you think should get together, names. Any and every thing. Anything you have to say, say it.
about 2 years ago Griffon said:
Keep righting!! This is great!!!
almost 3 years ago Mermaid Annabella said:
it'a a really good start and i can't wait until you write the next chapters. You have a couple grammar issues but all in all a very good story.
about 3 years ago Catherine Nevin said:
This is really good. But I think you should add more detail about the setting. Other than that, this is a great piece. Keep writing!
about 3 years ago Abby Sea said:
I'm not much of a fan of the Warriors series (my sister is, though, she reads and rereads the books all the time) so I'm probably not the best judge of how it relates to the books and all, but there is one general points I might want to bring your attention to. The plot changes from chapter to chapter almost randomly, so you should probably either make each chapter a separate story, or find a better way to thread them together. I do, however, like your writing style. You don't need much grammar help or anything and its pretty smooth. Good work!
almost 3 years ago Pyral said:
I like the changes you made.
almost 3 years ago Shammi said:
This was a really great edit. Compared to your original version, this was better and more improved. The storyline was amazing and it had a smooth, impressive flow. Very well written! :D