Mug Shot

Mug Shot

1 chapter / 495 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read


Ah, to be young again. Reflections of an aging hippie at juice time.




7 months ago Ebony Walker said:

This was a great piece of writing, the character's tone was superbly humorous, and the storyline was great. Keep up the great work! :)

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over 2 years ago Alobear said:

I really enjoyed this. It's very cleverly constructed, combing the flippant tone with a serious message. I loved the bit about her hair looking good in the picture, but also the cold facts about what happened to the released monkeys. Very nicely done.

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almost 3 years ago Hope said:

This piece deserves to win. You managed to create a tone and pace that work within the word limit, but the content is so compelling. It's funny, it's thoughtful, and your speaker is believably wise and experienced. Great job, really, and I wish you the best of luck!

((oh, but maybe re-upload to fix whatever font glitch made your numbered list change))

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almost 3 years ago Naomi Folettia said:

I liked that you wrote about a person when I think most people wrote about animals. This was about a woman with a past. It was about the days she was young and the things she missed. You did a good job at not making the monkey story sound forced and actually making it sound like it happened. Your's is a nice little story. I don't know what mine is even about anymore :/

Well, good luck on the contest, fellow contestant! :)



almost 3 years ago Jimmy said:

Fantastic! Well-written and fluid! I enjoyed the sister disapproving the mug. I appreciated the sense of longing to be young and rebellious again. I could picture everything without it all being spelled out for me. Also, the monkey story is hilarious. She tried to save the monkeys and instead probably hurt more than she helped. Youthful, naive, misguided attempt to save the monkeys that the narrator doesn't completely regret because at least she tried something. I appreciate that perspective.


almost 3 years ago William D'Andrea said:

This does sound like one of the pranks that activists took part in during the late 60's and early 70's. I'm glad to see the narrator finally grew up. However my concern is about those activists who haven't grown up and still don't act responsibly.

My entry in this contest, titled "Demands of the Activists" deals with just what disastrous results their irresponsible behavior could lead to.