The Death Row

The Death Row

1 chapter / 149 words

Approximately less than a minute to read

Description:

The short painful life of a animal destined for death in a mainstream farming system.

1 of the winners of the 2014 animal rights contest

Genres:

Writing, Horror

Comments(28)

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almost 3 years ago Amber said:

This is very eye-opening and well written. You've made me so much aware of animal slaughter. I don't know if this was your intention but now I realize that I don't really think about where my food comes from. Until now.

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almost 3 years ago Chloƫelise said:

I usually try not to think about the way animals are treated in slaughter houses because it's too depressing and I feel there's nothing I can do to change it. However, after reading this, I realize that what's being done to these animals is too sad and painful to just ignore. Your passion for this cause is evident in your powerful writing. The emotions seep through your words in a truly beautiful way. Really, a deeply moving piece.

If you have the time and feel up to it, can you read my short story Cool as Hell? It would only take about 5 minutes or so :) thanks for sharing your work with me!

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almost 3 years ago Mei Below said:

This is amazing!! The changing perspectives really got the point across of how awful these processes of killing animals is, it's great that you wrote this. Congrats for getting so far in that contest! Awesome piece!

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almost 3 years ago melanie mills said:

I have a feeling you're a vegetarian. :) This was very well written. Though it was short, it got your point across very well. It was also very sad. Great job.

Reviews(7)

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over 2 years ago Ari said:

First off, thanks again for the cover :)

Okay this was a very powerful piece! I love the way you've broken each line up so it gives a stilted delivery, almost how I'd imagine our last thoughts would be like before we died.

As with the other review- I also belive Inhumane and Undignified are one word.

Also, the line where it says "Let them Free", it feels a little awkward. Maybe "Set them Free" or "Let them be Free" or something?

Then the line where it mentions the people inside the walls, you don't need 'the workers' in the brackets because it takes away from the......punchiness? of the line and I think it's implied anyway.

So yeah, just those few things but other than that it is amazing, in a sad and introspective sort of way.

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almost 3 years ago Angelina Montanari said:

This was really sad :O thats just terrible! I found some errors but you don't have to change them they are just suggestions: the fourth sentence you wrote, "Un Dignified" I believe undignified is one word not two. Inhumane is one word also. Other then that this is such a good (but really sad) story you wrote. It captures the fear of what is going on and the way you wrote it sentence paragraphs adds to the intensity and the emotion. Good job ^^