The Maine Course

The Maine Course

1 chapter / 499 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

Jeff makes his girlfriend Darcy a homemade dinner, which introduces them to a new friend.

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4 months ago Margarito Hurwitz said:

Interesting book, now I kooking for something similar=)) My blog

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6 months ago Hannah said:

I am from Maine so I decided, why not read this? It actually turned out to be pretty good. I suggest continuing it into something longer. More details! It would be cool to find out what happens to "Larry". Ha ha! Keep writing!

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7 months ago Joy said:

I am from Maine and New Hampshire...So I just had to read it. I love the play on words and I think this is a cute story. Plus, I think it would be great if your turn it into something longer.

Good Writing, Joy

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over 1 year ago Valin said:

Great work, keep it up

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25 days ago Amelia H. said:

Perfectly fine writing, but I do not understand why animal rights activists need to push their agenda on everyone, even their own boyfriends! It was confusing because if I was severely passionate about what was in my food, I would say something here or there, but to be honest, Darcy's attitude about her boyfriend was very rude and inconsiderate. Lobster costs big money. 5/10 for me.

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4 months ago FirstDraftWorstDraft said:

Stylistically, this is a perfectly good story. All the grammar boxes are checked, each sentence flows from one to the next, and the dialogue actually sounds like dialogue, although there is some expository dialogue that probably could've been handled better. All in all though, you've got chops.

However, I'd recommend you really work on your formation of story. A good story should create characters we care about ant put them through interesting scenarios. This scenario is fine, but neither of the characters were. If they have been dating/married/in love for awhile, him forgetting about her preferences and boiling a lobster for her just makes him an ass. Her trying to force her own preferences on him (I still want to eat beef, baby steps) just makes her unlikable. I don't want these two to be together, which makes the story pointless. I know these sound like personal preferences, but these are the type of things you have to think about if you want to become a good writer.