Machina

Machina

3 chapters / 1454 words

Approximately 7 minutes to read

Description:

July Challenge Winner! 750 words limit --> Except I have added an additional chapter because of the many comments saying I should add more, but since it is not a priority right now, I will be adding slowly. Freedom has been stripped from the world, and a new government called the New Order has turned everyone into human drones, all exactly alike. Except for the ones lurking in the shadows, like Mikah.

Comments(50)

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26 days ago Matthew Thomas said:

Great world building, very descriptive! I was hooked right off the bat.

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2 months ago Lawrence Bear said:

Intresting piece. You have weaved a fine tale of suspence, drama and adventure. Cant wait to read more.

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6 months ago A Writer said:

What a fun read! I want to hear more!

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9 months ago Marko Tomas said:

Oh dear lord that is horrifying

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over 1 year ago Sophie said:

Hook, line, and sinker. Those were honestly my thoughts after reading the first paragraph. Your writing was fluid and created a clear image in my head, and I didn't feel as if reading it was an effort, but rather an enjoyment. I like the pace of the story- you're constantly flowing through the story line. And let me tell you, the very last sentence of the first chapter left me breathless. I loved this.

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almost 2 years ago Juliet Bruce said:

This is amazing! Your descriptions are so great, and the characters are believable. With so many dystopian books nowadays, it's hard to stand out. You have done just that, by making it short enough to hold interest, but long enough to quench your readers' thirst. Bravo!