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~Winner of the July Challenge~ “Even death has a heart.”
― Markus Zusak, The Book Thief
almost 2 years ago Kimberly Tenneson said:
It has an eerie beauty - haunting, even. I would love to hear more of this story and more of the character. Beautifully written!
almost 2 years ago Shemona Singh said:
Very well written! Your description is beautiful.
over 2 years ago Vanishing Starlight said:
I think what really makes this a good story is your use of details and the senses. :) I love stories like these. nice work!
over 2 years ago Kelsey Kendall said:
Beautifully written! A little short, in my opinion, but still incredible!
over 1 year ago Lady Red said:
I love how you made Death a person, and when you killed off the girl, you showed me that death is inevitable and that what goes around comes right back around. Good job, I hope you continue this!
over 1 year ago ScarlettFyre said:
I really enjoyed this. Death is such an interesting figure and I always love reading stories that explore him (or her, I suppose). It's part of why I enjoyed The Book Thief so much. That and the fact that I just love an eccentric narrator.
Anyway, back on topic. The descriptions were amazing and you set the scene so perfectly. I also loved the way you suggested at the torture rather than described it. It worked a lot better than if you had described it in detail- then you run the risk of either making it too tame, or shocking the reader so much it isn't creepy anymore.
Anyway, well done on an amazing story!