1 chapter / 1000 words

Approximately 5 minutes to read


this short story is the reason i don't do swaps anymore

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over 1 year ago Avery Cloud-Estep said:

Your story grasped me immediately and the details were in-depth enough that I was able to imagine everything perfectly. I would have loved for there to be more of the story! It did not end abruptly at all, but instead left me wanting more.

On a side note, sometime last year you asked me to do a swap with you and that was when I was on a too long hiatus from this website and did not see the request until today. If you are still interested in doing your part of the swap, read any story I have, if not, I completely understand. Thanks!



about 3 years ago ShadowDreamTales said:

Haha this is soo cool. I love the metallic box and how each button when pressed transfers the Demon into some type of fantasy. This reminds me of a mystery game I played called lost souls how a father turn himself into a demon and was trying to capture the souls of his twin daughters. The detail in this story is epic and very visual. The images and sounds took place when I began reading. Awesomely wirtten!


about 3 years ago Ehtaniel said:

That short story is well made. You create a character and a universe in a number of word that is quite small. You could have explain a lot more (why does it works that way, where from is that character, etc.) but you just give what's necessary for the story and pretty nothing much, which seems a good thing to me. All that makes a really short story, nicely wrapped. Then, perhaps there's possibility to extend it into a novella or even a novel, but I guess you would have to add a lot to the universe and the way it's works, besides having some strong plot, and I don't know if it'll be worth the effort. :-)