Not Another Iron Man Fanfiction

Not Another Iron Man Fanfiction

22 chapters / 18230 words

Approximately about 2 hours to read

Description:

*REVISED EDITION!* This is the newest, latest version of my Iron Man fanfiction, and the VERY LAST revision I will ever make! The entire Iron Girl series is going through a major overhaul. But in the meantime, here is the first one.

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A quiet and highly intelligent girl who knows nothing of adventure and even less of danger, Isabella Stark finds herself knee-deep in conflict and intrigue when she is sent to stay at her uncle's home after her parents separate. But what happens at 10880, Malibu Port, 90265 will also set off the rest of Isabella's future in an exciting way she never dreamed of. Set during the events of Iron Man 2, this is part one of the Iron Girl series. Enjoy!

Comments(7)

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over 2 years ago chessi maria said:

Hey! I've read thru chapter 11. I'm just reading for my own enjoyment, but I thought I'd say that I love the story so much!

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over 2 years ago Huda Memon said:

This is one of the most awesome things I have ever read. I could not stop reading it. You captured the characters very well and the dialogue was good. The plot was good and your description was great. You did great and it was amazing!☻

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over 2 years ago chessi maria said:

Read thru chapter 5. Loved Tony and Pepper so far; I could really see their faces from the movie with your descriptions!

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over 2 years ago chessi maria said:

BTW, only read thru chapter 1. Got me hooked, I'll be back for more!

Reviews(18)

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over 2 years ago just_another_bookaholic said:

Okay, finished! Again, I reeeeeeeallly like this update. So refreshing that she turned it down, which I think really fits with her character. I read her as this contradicting mix of reserved, meticulous, and reckless with a protective streak as wide as Tony. So this route made a lot of sense for me - when she used the suit and when she didn't.

Overall, I think the plot line was a bit rushed. I'd loved to see Iz's process of making the suit, but the content I got instead of things that lengthed the story I'd gladly trade. However, the pace was pretty consistent throughout - even during the fight scenes it didn't seem particularly urgent. I think that comes from the place you're writing the story from; this is a recounting from Iz's POV and the I'm-right-there feeling I like from fight scenes just wasn't there.

Iz, like a lot of protagonists, suffers from a bit too much intuition. She "senses" a lot - Tony's secret, that Hammer is a jerk, something's up with Natalie, etc. I think most people who are reading this will know the major plot points, so the foreshadowing isn't as necessary as if it was original fiction. So I think it'd be interesting to see Iz if she didn't have all those hints, see how she'd react to situations. Or just make those traits of observant-ness and intuition established traits instead of plot devices.

Regardless of what I say, I know this is the last draft, but these are just thoughts. But oh my god! Such a good revamp and waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay worth the read.

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over 2 years ago just_another_bookaholic said:

Just finished "Mom's the word." I have to say these Iz/Tony and Iz/Coulson interactions feel much more realistic. That Iz is actually dealing with the real fallout of making a suit is awesome. Plus the fact that she initially butted heads - and not even in a fun, bickery way - adds more to their relationship afterwards, I think. Tony was much more how I would see him looking after his niece - awkward, irresponsible, and really only liking her after a while.

Coulson was really well done - I think that's exactly how he would handle the situation with Iz, though he did get a bit Dr. Phil (hehe) with getting Tony and Iz to talk. But that he was serious and kind later when it was appropriate was so him. ALSO I'M KINDA DYING BECAUSE OF TRIPLETT. Ahem. But yes, much more realistic about what it would be like if a 14 year old tried to make an Iron Man suit. Curious to see how she's going to turn it around and to it full time.