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Approximately 4 minutes to read
A story of the supervised life of a Sim.
over 2 years ago Luna Merrigold said:
OMG THIS IS SOO AWESOME!! YOU HAVE TO CONTINUE THIS SOMEHOW!!! THE ENDING MADE ME CLINCH!
over 2 years ago TartyBeaRabbit ◕。◕ said:
Nuuuuu!! Who would do that to a poor little Sim?! D': (My Little sister calls them "Simpsons" XD)
over 2 years ago Ian Dennis said:
I've never played "Sims", but fortunately, I didn't need to have in order to understand this story. This was very good, despite the tragic ending- thanks for sharing!
over 2 years ago Patience Teboe said:
Awesome. I haven't played the Sims, but I understood it. I liked the way you made the controllers seem so evil and the Sim so helpless
over 2 years ago Lydia Nixon said:
Very well written! I love how you managed to convey the frustration of such a hopeless struggle, while at the same time emphasizing the humor of the situation. I haven’t played the Sims, but you set it up well enough that I was still able to follow along and enjoy the story. You also did a good job of making “Them” seem like these sadistic gods who decide the Sims’ fate on by whim alone. Nice touch.
There were a few places where the punctuation and word choice seemed to not fit, but since it was told from the perspective of a Sim, I wasn’t sure if that was a writing error or me simply not understanding how the Sims think and speak. Just check it over for the final draft to see if you had any typos.