Nowhere But Up

Nowhere But Up

1 chapter / 966 words

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PLEASE VOTE FOR THIS PIECE IN THE FINAL CONTEST POLL IF YOU THINK IT'S THE BEST OF THE 5 :) - Brandon Sanderson contest entry, so please heart if you think it deceives it. 1000 word limit. Careful what you wish for might sound like a warning phrase, but this genie couldn't care less. There's only one thing she wants.

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about 3 years ago Haylie said:

I really liked this story a lot actually. I found myself thinking of Aladdin, just because of the genie aspect, but that quickly disappeared after her swift and clever murder. It was really well written, with no grammar mistakes that I could detect. I think you have a solid entry here for the contest, all the best to you!

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about 3 years ago Two-ThirdsDivine said:

I liked the twist of this story and how the genie had a very bored attitude in the beginning. The flow of the story was nicely done, and the people she encountered was great for back story. I also liked the fact that she isn't naive like she was with other clients, though I'm surprised she murdered him, but that was a nice touch. And it was a lovely ending when you came to show the title of the story. This is fantastic work :)

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about 3 years ago Caeley B said:

Okay first off- I adore the thought of an evil genie, that's absolutely ingenious. The way she killed off Mr. Aaron was short and sweet- a perfect way to wrap up loose ends for a short story. Your sentences flowed very well, and word choice was good. The only thing I would say really would be mix up word choice with dialogue as there is a lot of "he said, she said". However, I love the portrayal of "evil" qualities like contempt, narcissism, aloofness. They all made Desia seem very righteous in her escape, yet still unrelatable enough to be deemed evil. Well done! Good luck with the contest!

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about 3 years ago Cait Cher said:

Wow, the ending was cold. I didn't expect that to happen at all. Nice twist. I found one small error that you could fix quickly.

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Any other way, what a great contest entry.

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3 months ago nairy said:

العاب بنات موقع العاب للبنات فقط يختص بتنزيل جميع العاب طبخ الجديدة في عالم العاب الفلاش الاون لاين يتميز موقع العاب طبخ بوجود العديد من المشرفين والمديرين لكي يقومون بوضع جميع الالعاب بشكل يومي العاب تطرح لاول مرة في عالم الاون لاين الخاص ب العاب الفلاش فعلا هناك العاب طبخ للفراخ وللحمام وهناك العاب طبخ لجميع الاكلات المشهورة , مكرونة بشاميل , كبدة , وجميع انواع اللحوم الاخري لذلك الان يجب اختبار قدرتك الحسية علي الطبخ فهل انتي قادرة علي هذا التحدي انه التحدي الاكبري علي الاطلاق العاب طبخ لن تجدها الا هنا كما يتميز موقعنا بانه الموقع الاول في الاستماع الي زواره الكرام حيث ااذا اردتي سيدتي اي لعبة يمكنك طرحها فقط علينا عن طرق فورم اتصل بنا وسيتم الرد عليكم باللعبة المراد تنزيلها ان شاء الله ماذا تنتظر الان ابدأ اللعب مع اجمل العاب طبخ بنات الرائعة اذا كنتي تبحثين عن اجمل الوصفات والاشهر في العالم اذا نحن هنا في العاب طبخ جميلة جدا نمكنك من وضع يدك واولي الخطوات لتعليم الطبخ فهناك العاب طبخ مساعدة لتعلمك خطوة بخطوة طريق تحضير الاطباق المميزة لديك فمثلا يوجد اشهر الوصفات التي يوصفها اشهر الشيفات علي مستوي العالم الغربي والعربي فأذا كنتي تلحمين ان تكوني مثل والدتك او تكوني مثل احد الشيفات المشهورات بالخارج كل ما عليك فعله هو التنقل من داخل لعبة طبخ بنات الي اخري لكي تكوني علي اتم الاستعداد للتعلم وفي النهاية نصيحة المطبخ خاصه يجب ان يضاف له كل شخص اضافة مميزة فيجب عليكي سيدتي ان تقومي بوضع اللمسة الفنية الخاصه بك في اي وصفة تخصك انتي فقط لانها بالفعل تفرق جدا في التفرقة بين شيف والاخر اطبخي طبخا في المطبخ

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over 2 years ago Bayleigh Dyer said:

I'm not going to lie, it took me awhile to get back to you about swaps, sorry :) but honestly this is fantastic! a real treat, I've always seen the legends behind genies as too fluffed up. because if you read the real stuff (the real legends) they're quite tricky and mischievous. if you're still interested in a swap, I would love you to read my book "COLLECTOR" but if sirens aren't your cup of tea then you are free to read anything else. "TRUTH" is an honest story, but not for the average romantic to read. once again! this was fantastic, I'll have to check out some of your other stuff soon. have a great day/night/you know -BAY