When Love Conquered All

When Love Conquered All

1 chapter / 1372 words

Approximately 7 minutes to read

Description:

This is a work in progress, pretty much fetus status when it comes to my writing process. This is an idea I randomly got, and I have a general idea as to where I want this to go, but right now this is all I have.

The prologue (what I have so far) was inspired by a song called "What If You" by Josh Radin (there is one or two lines of dialogue that I took from the song and placed in the story because it fit so well), so if you'd like to hear it, here is the Youtube link. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6rcRlD6LYMU Enjoy!

**Also, caution: some mature content.**

While the names of Romeo and Juliet are used and there are many references beyond that to William Shakespeare's play, this is not an interpretation of the classic. This story is purely my own creation, with some references, but mainly my plot and ideas. If you are not a fan of Shakespeare's play, try to give it a chance and keep this in mind. Happy reading!

Genres:

Writing, Romance, Novel

Comments(7)

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over 2 years ago Mars said:

Well, I didn't get through to the end, despite it being such a short piece. I was worried when I read through the description about the mature content, and then there was Juliet ripping off her nightgown . . . . Up until that point, I was fairly interested in what was going on.

I thought the use of the names Romeo and Juliet was odd, considering the association with the names--I didn't see any reference to Shakespeare's play other than those, except maybe the star-crossed lovers thing. Of course, I didn't read through the whole thing, so I might not have caught all the references, but I still would advise changing the character names.

The structure of the writing itself is well done, and I liked the flow of words. If it weren't for the mature content, I'd probably have kept reading.

Sorry I couldn't be of more help!

--Mars

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over 2 years ago Daniel Reddy said:

Well, you asked me to read this and in return you would read one of mine. So, indeed there are a few typos, but aside, the story is alright. I prefer the traditional take on R&J, but this is sort of an interesting perception of maybe what that night was like when Juliet looked out and saw Romeo.

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over 2 years ago Stephanie Marasco said:

this was really good. I think your biggest strength is with your descriptions, you were able to perfectly display what you wanted and I found that very nice to read. Loved the twist on the original story. Overall, nice job!!!

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over 2 years ago Joni Marie Girod said:

Gah, heartbreak and tragedy! This had all the emotion from the original Shakespearian play without the idiotic ending. I liked this way more than thd original. I am curious though, did you mean for Romeo and Juliet to be the same characters with the same background and just make different choices? Because if that is the case Romeo and Juliet were of the same social class. Other than that I saw no flaws. Excellent writing, I wonder what became of the two :)

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over 2 years ago Garima Gupta said:

I actually hate the story of Romeo and Juliet, but that didn't stop me from enjoying this. You had really beautiful descriptions in this and were able to focus on the things that need to be focused upon. Your portrayed your characters' emotions very well.

One thing that made me do a bit of a double take was when Romeo mentions that Juliet deserves someone with a bedroom as lavish as hers (or something like that). Maybe it's just me, but I thought that was a bit of a strange way to put it. And weren't Romeo and Juliet in the same social class?

Also one mistake I caught: "They'll be nothing I can do." - They'll should be There'll

Overall though, this is beautifully done. You've got a gift!