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You're only a monster if people say you are... and sometimes you might ask yourself who is the true monster?
5 days ago Eowyn Doyle said:
Please continue this! It is amazing!
3 months ago Roanoke Wilde said:
I started reading the first chapter and loved it! I can see a lot of potential, and will have to come back and read some more later. :)
about 1 year ago Avery Cloud-Estep said:
This was a very interesting story with unique characters. There was just one problem that was making the story be a difficult read, and that is the amount of grammatical errors.Just go through the story looking closely at every sentence to do the corrections. Other than that your story was enjoyable and I hope you add more to "The Untamed".
almost 2 years ago AkatsukiFreak31 said:
I received a message on my profile about a month ago asking for a swap. I finally got around to reading this. I'm sorry that it took so long. I loved the concept and plot behind this. It's very good, however, I have noticed a few errors (using were instead of we're; missing commas; stuff like that). Over all it is a good story and I hope to read more.
Because I read this for a swap will you please read "What Lies Beyond?" I am really proud of it and I'm hoping to publish it when I finish it. I've gotten a lot of praise from my friends on campus, but I would like the opinion of others that I don't know so well.
Thank you so much! Keep writing!
over 1 year ago Maria Rae said:
The whole idea of human-animal hybrids is fascinating and I was really interested to see how it developed in this world. It's a pretty unique concept as far as I know. I liked the plot and pacing for the most part as well. There was never a dull moment. The main character herself was enjoyable and had a bit of attitude, too (without being over the top!) which I always like to see. All in all, I'd really like to see this completed. It could potentially be a great read! :D
Unfortunately... I think you know, because most other people have pointed it out. You still need to put in a lot of work with your grammar. I don't say this to be mean, but I recommend 'English Grammar for Dummies' or a similar book. I have that one myself and it's so helpful! ^_^ (Obviously, they don't make you a dummy - just that they're easy to comprehend.) I'd actually recommend it to every writer because you can never know too much about punctuation in our profession, really.
Anyway, enough of that. I'm also up for going through this on Google Docs with you if you want. Just last week, I did that with another writer who had much the same problem. It really helped her to get on top of most of the errors. (You can check her out if you like - TaintedBlue with her story 'Victoria: The Rising'. She even mentions me in the description.) But it's up to you, of course. I just like to be helpful. :)
over 1 year ago SuperWhovianLiar said:
Hello. I am following through with my end of our swap.
So, I read everything and I absolutely love the concept of this story and the different types of hybrid characters. The plot of the story is a little confusing though and I don’t really understand what Enya’s (love this name) role is supposed to be in the kingdom. I also don’t really understand why the guy Damion’s wife hates her so much.
Anyway, to the real stuff.
I noticed that you have some grammar and spelling could use some looking at as sometimes you use the wrong spellings of words. Example would be-as some people have already pointed out-you use were instead of we’re or how in the prologue you say “But will she be the monster that the world will depicted her as?”
For this kind of stuff-which I have trouble with as well, believe it or not-you should read your stories out loud to yourself (or even just read them in your head) so as to make sure your sentences make sense and as a way to go back and check spelling.
All in all though, I did like this story and I can’t wait to read more of it.