The Untamed

The Untamed

8 chapters / 7455 words

Approximately 37 minutes to read

Description:

You're only a monster if people say you are... and sometimes you might ask yourself who is the true monster?

Genres:

Fantasy, Novel

Comments(14)

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about 1 month ago Eowyn Doyle said:

Please continue this! It is amazing!

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5 months ago Roanoke Wilde said:

I started reading the first chapter and loved it! I can see a lot of potential, and will have to come back and read some more later. :)

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about 1 year ago Avery Cloud-Estep said:

This was a very interesting story with unique characters. There was just one problem that was making the story be a difficult read, and that is the amount of grammatical errors.Just go through the story looking closely at every sentence to do the corrections. Other than that your story was enjoyable and I hope you add more to "The Untamed".

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about 2 years ago AkatsukiFreak31 said:

I received a message on my profile about a month ago asking for a swap. I finally got around to reading this. I'm sorry that it took so long. I loved the concept and plot behind this. It's very good, however, I have noticed a few errors (using were instead of we're; missing commas; stuff like that). Over all it is a good story and I hope to read more.

Because I read this for a swap will you please read "What Lies Beyond?" I am really proud of it and I'm hoping to publish it when I finish it. I've gotten a lot of praise from my friends on campus, but I would like the opinion of others that I don't know so well.

Thank you so much! Keep writing!

Reviews(8)

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almost 2 years ago SuperWhovianLiar said:

Hello. I am following through with my end of our swap. So, I read everything and I absolutely love the concept of this story and the different types of hybrid characters. The plot of the story is a little confusing though and I don’t really understand what Enya’s (love this name) role is supposed to be in the kingdom. I also don’t really understand why the guy Damion’s wife hates her so much.

Anyway, to the real stuff. I noticed that you have some grammar and spelling could use some looking at as sometimes you use the wrong spellings of words. Example would be-as some people have already pointed out-you use were instead of we’re or how in the prologue you say “But will she be the monster that the world will depicted her as?” For this kind of stuff-which I have trouble with as well, believe it or not-you should read your stories out loud to yourself (or even just read them in your head) so as to make sure your sentences make sense and as a way to go back and check spelling.

All in all though, I did like this story and I can’t wait to read more of it.

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over 2 years ago Zepheriah said:

This is great, as I am a writer who is very fond of hybrid characters. Like a Dracomancer, Human + Dragon? Anyways, enough about me, let's talk about this story. I read up to the second chapter because I was hooked the moment I found out what Enya's case was. There's just one minor mistake I saw a couple of times through out the story. Make sure you continue adding a comma at the end of dialogue if you add a dialogue tag afterwards. For instance, in Chapter one:

"Um...Damien...I mean Lord Gale." I said quietly.

It should be written like:

"Um...Damien...I mean, Lord Gale," I said quietly.

Only add the comma at the end if you add a dialogue tag.

And by the way, the reason I added a comma after "I mean" is because when you address someone that way you add a comma before the name. Like this for example:

"Hello, Mr. Wahlberg."

If you address the name first, then of course there's no reason to add a comma before:

"Mr. Wahlberg is a virtuous man, I think."

Good story though!