The Beginning

The Beginning

2 chapters / 1844 words

Approximately 9 minutes to read

Description:

One of ten winners
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So, this is for the Autumn Falls contest. Dallas is just a normal girl, in a normal home. Right? (Follows my characters from Life Remembered.)And yes the cover is anime, it sorta represents my characters and I like it. :D

Comments(13)

Reviews(3)

Kittenjeansprofile

about 1 year ago AeranDawn said:

It's wonderful...it really is, how you took a typical, everyday scene, and then you tinted it with magic. I think you're really talented, the way you put in the good/bad magic that's usually cliche and did it in a way so that it was almost intriguing in a way. I love the way you played with what I like to call light and shadow, too- how you kind of took something lighthearted, added a bit of seriousness in between, and then went back to that lightheartedness- it takes a lot of talent to melt into it naturally like that.

You're doing good on character development, but I think you could make your characters even more "three-dimensional" by extending beyond your reliance on dialogue to create the character personality and such.

But...good job, keep working at it!

Red-lips

over 2 years ago Taylor said:

I like it the only thing is that it is slightly confusing. Other then that little bit I did enjoy the writing and it was very good and had a good story line.

~Tay