Suicide

Suicide

1 chapter / 353 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

Thoughts about a girl at my school who killed herself about this time last year.

Genres:

Writing, Drama, Poetry

Comments(4)

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over 2 years ago Tonya Royston said:

This was really good. It's emotional, but not too sad. It made me like her. Your descriptions were incredible. It brought her to life and told me just enough to feel like I knew her. And lastly, I love the ending! Great job!

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over 2 years ago Linda D said:

I usually don’t read pieces containing suicide, but having liked your other pieces, thought I would chance this to see how you handled it. You handled it well. Not justifying her action, not proclaiming she’s in a better place, just stating the facts of the profound sadness and finality of it all, and the “why?”

It’s interesting you explain it as her thinking she didn’t think her story was worth telling. I would go just a bit further; that she didn’t believe she was the protagonist in her own story, but the antagonist, and so she ended the story before it could really begin. It’s just so sad on so many levels.

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almost 3 years ago Kyra said:

I wish more people would tackle these subjects. This is really good! A lot of people go through so many things.. and no body really notices you know? But good job :)

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almost 3 years ago Ana H. said:

You keep writing things that make me cry!

Reviews(3)

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over 2 years ago Your friend, Anonymous said:

This is really good, and really sad. I only have one recommendation; try adding commas. Some of your sentences move too quickly, and seem a little forced. A comma is a half-breath between the words, and sometimes even such a short space makes a large difference. I also would try experimenting with semi-colons and such. Overall, well done. And I am sorry for your loss.

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over 2 years ago Your friend, Anonymous said:

This is really good, and really sad. I only have one recommendation; try adding commas. Some of your sentences move too quickly, and seem a little forced. A comma is a half-breath between the words, and sometimes even such a short space makes a large difference. I also would try experimenting with semi-colons and such. Overall, well done. And I am sorry for your loss.