All the Wonders

All the Wonders

1 chapter / 274 words

Approximately 1 minute to read

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#BrightPlaces

What inspires me :)

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Writing, Fantasy

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almost 3 years ago Macy Clover said:

I really enjoyed reading your contest entry! I liked all of the very vivid description you used and I thought it was very intriguing and creative! Great work!

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almost 3 years ago R. E. Durbin said:

Wow, I mean, this is amazing. So many feels in so little words. I'm blown away. Now I want my own cloud. Sounds nice, and comfy. Every time I go in a plane I'm drawn to the clouds around me and my love of them only increase, as it did with this story. Are they not a wondrous thing of God's creation? I think you captured your own love of them and how they inspire you perfectly. Your room sounds so magical and welcoming. :D

Great job. Keep on writing and good luck in the contest.

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almost 3 years ago Yayono said:

Swap for Bright Places Contest :) When you have time, my story is "Bright Places".

I really liked that you turned reality into something of fantasy. I wasn't quite sure where you were going with the desert, tunnel, and fairies but after reading your last line it make everything so much more amazing! I re-read it knowing what you were comparing things to. This was very unique and I loved your approach. One thing I had a difficult time with was the wording. For example, "I wait for the goblins and fairies to peek..." I felt your sentence was missing a word right after peek. But, you're writing is different than I'm used to reading so, that could be the reason why some of your sentences didn't make full sense to me. Awesome job!

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almost 3 years ago Linda D said:

Quite a vivid imagination - indeed a bright place.

Good luck.

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almost 3 years ago Ryne Tipton said:

Interesting, I'm just really confused about what you're actually writing about. I see that this is in the fantasy category, so I assume I'm probably missing something, but none of this made sense to me. Sorry, I just didn't really understand the robot, lizard, etc.

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almost 3 years ago Shayymin said:

The only thing I saw that I recommend being fixed was a line close to the beginning that went, "shining with the charity of it all" which I'm not sure quite makes sense... maybe I'm just dumbed down from math homework.

Other than that, I thought it was a unique way to approach the prompt, I liked how it blurred a bit between what was reality and what was real, and I thought it was overall a nice piece to read.