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this is my entry for the Family Expectations. requirements are 250 words or less
almost 2 years ago InvadingTurtle said:
I'm glad your dad was able to push you into a degree you enjoy. :)
While I did enjoy this piece, I'm going to suggest that you read through it again and look at paragraphing, punctuation and verb tenses.
>>>Examples of possible changes:
...one summer morning.
[new paragraph because of an implied change in 'time'] Just the other day[,] my father asked me what I wanted to do with my life[.]
[new paragraph because a new character is 'talking'] To this I repli[ed,] "I don't know[.]"
Overall, I like the picture this piece paints of your father, and the first two sentences really drew me in. :)
almost 2 years ago TT le foot said:
this is awesome! good luck!
about 2 years ago meme said:
This is great! Hearted!
about 2 years ago Morgan Allen said:
Thank you for inviting me to read this piece.. And way to go on college. Keep doing what you love.
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