Vacant Memory

Vacant Memory

19 chapters / 12184 words

Approximately about 1 hour to read

Description:

1st Draft COMPLETED
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Meet Nikita, a teen who was born with the power of time travel, or was she? Memories of her past seem false, and she feels as if she missing something. Nikita goes a search for who she really is but her findings are nothing like what she expected...
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Book Two: Vacant Past

Comments(7)

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7 days ago Roanoke Wilde said:

I only got to read the prologue and first two chapters but...I LOOVED IT!! I'm already intrigued, and can't wait to find out more about Nikita and the person who found the journal. GOOD JOB!! :) I'll come back!!

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over 1 year ago CeceO (On&off) said:

I love the character, Nikita! This is an incredible novel, although there are many spelling mistakes that can be easily corrected. Good work! I was so interested in it that I couldn't put it down!

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almost 2 years ago Laryn Anne said:

I LOVE the name Nikita. I want to meet someone with that name! (I guess I kind of did when I read your story...) I don't know a lot about New York, and especially Queens, but I loved the journal-style of writing you use! Also, one of the journal entries is my birthday... Brownie points for that! (January 20th!) I love the time travel, sci-fi elements of this story, and you're doing a GREAT job!

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almost 2 years ago Headintheclouds said:

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The part with the journal is where it gets really interesting. I like the mystery of it and the idea of time travel intrigues. Also love the name Jeven (original and unique)

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over 1 year ago Alena Parker said:

Yay! Thanks so much for swapping. :) I'm just going to write notes as they occur to me, so my apologies for the randomness.

PROLOGUE:

She [is] so cute for a six year old.

Make sure that you're using commas correctly when addressing a person.

"... and a hard one at that[.] I combed..."

CHAPTER ONE

A few capitalization errors. I try not to mention every single one, so I don't have specific sites for them. (Same with the note on commas above ^^)

"[Oh well,] I [guess]..."

CHAPTER TWO

Sighing[,] I got up out of my bed...

While all your chapters were riddled with grammar errors, (I didn't want to correct them all, so just go through and make sure they're all corrected), but this story was fantastic. You have an amazing sense of adventure and character depth. Honestly, I'm hooked. Your title and your cover photo perfectly reflect just what your story is about. :) Just fix up your grammar, and this story will be unbeatable.

~Lia