The Watcher in Silence

The Watcher in Silence

1 chapter / 603 words

Approximately 3 minutes to read

Description:

Just another little poem for ya'll. Enjoy lovelies!

Genres:

Writing, Drama, Poetry

Comments(15)

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over 2 years ago Aurora Emmalynn said:

That was an amazing. One of the best poems I have ever read and the rhyming was very good. I can't wait to read more of your work.

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over 2 years ago Cate Eliot said:

This was really well done. You really nailed the imagery and the flowing of emotions! Though it's not too long, you really capture a lot of movement and feeling. I liked the beginning best. I can definetly tell you work hard on this one. The only error I caught was a "the" that I believe should be "they". Really wonderful job!! I hope you write more like this. Happy writing!! (PS the cover is gorgeous!)

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over 2 years ago Allyn Hoffert said:

This was really cool! I really loved that you told a story through your poem. I don't tend to do that, but it was cool! One comment was your meter and your rhyme scheme got off in some places, and it was a bit choppy to read after your meter and rhyming being so consistent for such a long time. Excellent job. :)

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over 2 years ago Kara Hamlet said:

Very good. I loved it. Poetry is one of my favorite things.

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over 2 years ago Michael Boyd said:

This is excellent, but I noticed a few spelling errors. For instance, "If you looks you in the eyes" instead of "If he looks you in the eyes", and "The Watcher her no answer" instead of "The Watcher had no answer". Other than that small nitpick, I loved it.

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over 2 years ago Leah Rowan Bloschichak said:

Beautifully written, I'm only slightly confused when you wrote " the watched her". Was it maybe a mistake you made while typing? But overall I love how much it flows, like a song or a melody.