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11 months ago Selena Brooks said:
I love this so much! The contrast between the rose and the thorn was beautiful. The only thing I noticed was that you spelled "its" as "it's"--other than that, this was flawless. Great work!
over 1 year ago Lorelle Shorten said:
Oh I love the metaphor towards the end!!! I've never heard anything like it and I love it. It's sad but beautiful. :)
over 1 year ago The Captain Carrot said:
This was very sad for me.
It sounds like an abusive relationship at the end of the poem (pretty sure that's what it's supposed to represent, but hey, I could be wrong).
It was short. VERY short. Not that short is bad, but it would be nice if you could a few more descriptive details here and there.
However, I'm aware that some people don't like to add descriptions because it takes away from the tone that the piece provides, so if that was the reason it was so short, then I totally respect that.
It was short, sweet, and to the point. It had a very clear message, and even though I liked the message, it seemed so direct I didn't find it thought provoking.
Again, this could be your style, which is fine, I'm just giving my uneducated opinion (since poetry is most definitely not my strongest suite).
over 1 year ago Eira J. Skye said:
W0W! So Beautiful! Short and Simple! You Have described life beautifully and descriptively! Life Has those soft petals but those pointed thorns as well! Very Deep and Intense! I'm not very good at understanding and writing poems! But this is Really Lovely. Mostly Poems are restricted to Rhymes! But this is not and that makes it different (in a good way!) Keep Writing More! :D
I will definitely come again and read more of your poems! :)
By the way I LOVE Red Colour! So this is one of my favourite poems! :D
Keep it up and High! :)
over 1 year ago Stormie "Ducky" McNeal said:
Wow... this piece was beautiful. I'm glad you wanted to swap :D
I am guessing this is what people call 'free from', it's beautiful. Your poem isn't restricted by having to rhyme or use the same sentence length.
I loved how to went from describing the rose, to using it as a metaphor, to the thorns. And that is so true about life.
I found this poem to be enjoyable and relatable. I love the way it is written. Nice flow.
over 1 year ago jiny ani said:
I like how you begin with an image, and then use it as a metaphor. You transitioned between the positive aspect of the rose very smoothly. The choice not to mention the thorns until the end left the impression that the narrator learned about them later, or at least as the reader is made aware of them. This adds a story-like element to the poem even though you are using very few words. You tell a relatable story by using few words to describe an image, and I really like that. :)