11 months ago John Gately said:

This was pretty great; it was kind of Ginsberg-esque, but less druggy and more optimistic. I think you did a really great job using words that are of the beaten path, like "dulcimer". My favorite section was probably the one describing the clothes - that really stuck out to me. Overall, it had a happy, kind of care-free feeling about it, which, while not typically my favorite kind of writing, was still highly enjoyable to read. The only thing I that I didn't like was that there were some lines that I feel could have been brought together into a single line. That's really just a stylistic thing though. Great job overall though.

11 months ago Liam Title said:

Very good job. Your poem had a great feel to it, and really contained what you were saying just in the style of the writing. I liked the flow as well, and the visuals were great. Also, good job avoiding the obvious "punch line", I really hate those. Just the poem itself was funny, and that's good. Good luck with the contest, I'm sure that this will do very well.