Open body

Open body

7 chapters / 5135 words

Approximately 26 minutes to read

Description:

I don't care about spelling, all I care about is the writing.

Genres:

Action, Horror, Novel

Comments(5)

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over 5 years ago Devon Chamers said:

This is really good I couldn't take my eyes off of it! I can't wait to read some more of it!!!

Katara1

over 6 years ago Areik said:

This is pretty good, one thing is that your characters don't really seem, idk, realistic? Just a little pet peeve of mine. Also, while reading some of your other writing, and this I realize you use the same phrase when your character becomes unconscious. I do the same thing often, with a different phrase, but I would suggest trying to change it up a little bit.

Katara1

over 6 years ago Areik said:

Okay where to go, perhaps Blake rapes her? It seems like he may have while she was unconscious but maybe while she is conscious, and maybe tortures her before the police finds them or something? Or maybe just the torture and she tries to escape. I got quiet a few of my ideas by searching rape, or kidnap in the tags thing and reading some stories. Just some ideas. Please continue.

Katara1

over 6 years ago Areik said:

This is really good, I hope you continue this. Quite a few spelling/grammar errors. I suggest copy and pasting it in word, I am sure word would pick up on them.

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