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Winner of the Halloween 2015 contest!
over 1 year ago Linda D said:
I know the contest is finished and you won. Congratulations, BTW, but...(you felt that "but" coming, didn't you?) It would have been nice to end on the dance image - more than "floating" she's "dancing", since you mentioned it before. Maybe you didn't have the words available.
Other than that, I loved the whole piece, the build up and ending. you painted a full picture in a small amount of word. A well deserved win.
over 1 year ago Oakley J said:
Sweet and creepy at the same time. Thanks for the read. :)
over 1 year ago Josie Rapacz said:
Even though this is first person, I still get the kind of disconnected writing that you get from third person. Also, the first sentence is awkward. Congrats on winning the contest.
over 1 year ago Madison Elizabeth said:
over 1 year ago Daniel Mathers said:
Okay I'm glad I decided to read this one after the silly "Out of the Book..." one. This one was great I really liked it, you couldnt tell where it was going and then had a great quick ending that you had to think through and it was thought provoking.
Nice job I liked this one, feel free to review any of my stories.
over 1 year ago M.E.M. said:
It starts out nice and sweet then it ended creepy, which is good I guess. I can’t stand creepy, but you nailed it on the head!! Great work.