Flash Freeze

Flash Freeze

1 chapter / 498 words

Approximately 2 minutes to read

Description:

What's better than a Quest road trip? Anything basically. Especially when you're stuck traveling with your little brother and a slacker from school.

Was for the Flash Fiction contest.

Comments(20)

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over 5 years ago C.P. Patterson said:

this is pretty interesting, and upbeat. I like how they have no idea why they're going to Chicago and it makes you want to keep reading.

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over 5 years ago Rachel Hera said:

I hope you continue this one!

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over 5 years ago Marceline R. said:

Gooooood job! That was great and so funny.I like your style.

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almost 6 years ago A. Kennedy said:

Haha love the little song thingy XD

Reviews(2)

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about 6 years ago Vivian Thai said:

This was certainly interesting, short and simple. The characters are developed a bit. You definetly need more descriptions. So Jake isn't her brother? He is someone who was her partner for a school project and got dragged into it because he was at her house? is that correct? I think you need to seperate mroe about how Jake isnt her brother. One thing that I thought you should have talked mroe about was how everyone was apparently frozen. This has much potential and I think if you continue it it will become a wonderful story! to be honest I want you to write more for this!!! Will you be writing more (if you dont mind answering on my page that would be great!)

Well Happy Writing

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about 6 years ago Elizabeth Bells said:

Alright, I actually really liked this. It was short, nice and simple. Although the whole 'everyone is frozen' part is a bit confusing, I like your characters. The poor girl is likable and a little funny. Her brothers are adorable. I really enjoyed this stroy. Will you keep going or are you done? Either way, this is very nice. Although I'd add a little more detail.

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