R. Soland

My Writings

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    In His Book

    Inspired by the YouTuber Caspar Lee, this story is about a teenager who's famous for his TV show, and about his number one fan. While …

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    to help a Beautiful

    This is my second try at this story. An enormous thank you to everyone who was interested and helpful the first time around. Your comm…

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  • Maid daughter final
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    The Maid's Daughter and The King's Son

    A screenplay about a maid and a prince and the prince's older brother and two princesses and a King and Queen... and a whole country a…

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  • Wedding day
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    A Slave's Choice

    Gwen and Hartson are both slaves and therefore have no choice in the matter when they are forced to be married. To each other. What's …

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  • Back to being
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    Back to Being ©

    *COMPLETE* Celia Grace is from a poor family. Her neighbors, the MacDaviens, have everything. And the two families are best friends. E…

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  • Dime a dozen
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    Dime a Dozen

    *COMPLETE* Scarlett Savannah Guthrie is famous for her beauty, voice, and her "dime-a-dozen" boys. Jerry, well, he's... not famous…

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11 days ago Kimberly Karalius said:

I know what you mean about lack of motivation. I've found that Figment is a great antidote for that - whenever I felt stuck, a reader's comment usually pulled me right out of that murky place and got me going again :)

Hmmm, I think what I'm looking for now is for Gwen and Hartson to find some common ground and stop treating each other like enemies. I feel this way because the system you created is too strict and runs like clockwork - so how can they NOT start procreating? Seems like they're going to suffer greatly for not following the rules, no matter how unfair they are. If Hartson and Gwen start falling in love with each other (and I kinda hope they do), maybe brainstorming how that happens would be a good place to start. What would make Hartson look less like an angry, stubborn man to Gwen? How might Gwen impress Hartson?

I don't know if I'm helping, haha. But... hopefully my rambling helps :)

By the way, if you've got some free time for reading coming up, I'd love ot hear what you think about my new manuscript, We Could Fall in Love. The first three chapters are here on Figment, but the whole novel is up on Swoon Reads - if it does well, I could get a publishing contract with them. But the site runs a lot like Figment, so the more comments and ratings, the better the chance.

It's an odd time of year for reading because everyone's either taking final exams or graduating, haha.

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14 days ago S.J. Bouquet said:

You don't sound like a moron xD I left a LONNNGGGG response, and after a long day of work, I can see how what I said would be confusing. To be honest, I'm surprised you responded at all. If I'd gotten a message as long as the one I left you, I would have just been like, "Nope." and avoided Figment for a minimum of five days.

Anywho, ramble over.

My new story is "Willow McBain's Book of Pet Peeves". And could you maybe just not read Enticement at all? I have a feeling that I'll just end up gutting the first chapter, and all your hard work of pointing out the "it" sentences would be for naught.

And I've been busy, so my writing schedule is pretty messed up :/ I just went 20 days without writing, and it sucks.

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14 days ago Lydia Albano said:

Oh and hey. So I updated 'check.'- thank you ever so much for the pressure. I think it was just what I needed. I didn't add a ton but I'm writing more now. ;)

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15 days ago S.J. Bouquet said:

I apologize for taking so long to respond to you!

Now that my head is clear, and I can think more rationally, I realize that you are totally right. Some of my poor word choices (in my story) would cause my readers to skim. I don't want that, so thank you for pointing them out to me :)

If I knew you in real life, I feel like I would have been better prepared for that review. I'm glad that we are able move on, though :)

"I know telling you broadly to clean up all the its isn’t helpful, but I don’t want to be controlling and tell you exactly how every sentence should be worded, you know?" Yes, I do know :) But I wouldn't mind you, or any reviewer, being 'controlling'. In the end, it's my choice what to change and what not to. Typically, when I get a review, I try to sort between what would be a necessary change, and what changes I can add my own flare to.

Like... hmm... what's a good example? This is probably a horrible example, but here we go: I've said before that I like guidance. When someone tells me that I have mistakes, and doesn't point them out, I get all panicky inside. I don't trust myself to find all the mistakes. When someone shows me exactly where I went wrong, and shows me how to correct it, I have a better understanding of my error. I remember what the person said, and try to avoid it in the future, and most of the time I /can/ avoid it, because I know precisely what to look out for.

Reading that back, I realize that I didn't give you an example. I just told you exactly how it is xD

I'm glad you don't think I'm an "obnoxious, ignorant, self-important little snit". I thought you were that kind of person at first, but now I see differently. You're not half bad :) We were just on a completely different page.

I've read your standards, and I think I'm up to them (now that I'm prepared). I'd still love for you to critique my work, however, I've decided to not continue my story "Enticement" for the time being. I've moved on to another story.

I haven't abandoned Enticement because of your review. It's just... a LOT of people felt like the first few chapters lacked life and detail. Even as I wrote it, I felt detached from the characters. I don't want to go back and re-do everything right now, so I've decided to do a different story. Hopefully, it will go better :) I'll still have grammar mistakes, but the actual plot and characters will stand out more (Lord willing!).

Whether or not you want to continue with Enticement, or read my new story is completely up to you :)

And goodness! Prom! I hope you have a blast :D

-S.J.

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17 days ago S.J. Bouquet said:

Oh heavens O_O

I'm sorry for making your bad day worse. Please forgive me. I do appreciate you reviewing my story for free.

Now, I realize that some of my words were harsh, but please understand that I was upset. I was already having an emotional day, and then I read your review where you used words like, "I don’t even care what the rest of the paragraph said" and "literally giving me a headache". Those words hurt me more potently then they should have. I lashed out. Again, please forgive me. I know I was in the wrong.

But also take into account that I never called you a "horrible, disgusting person", and I never will call you that.

We are strangers communicating through text on a website. I don't know what you look like when you type me. I don't know how to gauge your words exactly, because I don't know you. Because of these things, whenever I read your messages to me, I can only judge your attitude based on the way you word things. You've come across as aggressive both times you've talked to me. You've used border-line threatening phrases like, "there's no one on Figment I hate /yet/."

To be honest, you make me nervous and scare the shitola out of me. I would like to start on a fresh page with you. I would like for you to continue reading my story, and to help me. This is Figment, not Amazon. On Amazon, I expect nasty reviews. On Figment, though, I'm trying my best to make my story as perfect as possible, so as to lessen the mean comments on Amazon. With your help, I can achieve this. Telling me to "clean up every 'it' sentence" doesn't help me a whole lot. I tried to fix the "it" sentences. You made great points. However, I don't know HOW to fix every "it" sentences. To me, some sentences just need to start with "it". If you see differently, then show me exactly how you would fix 'it'. Guide me. Show me. Don't just tell me. With critiques, I expect a person to show me where I'm wrong, and then show me exactly how to change my error's. I value harsh critiques, but not harsh words.

Do you understand where I'm coming from? I hope you do... if you don't, and would just like to stop reviewing, I completely understand. I'm so sorry for all the trouble I've caused.

If I come across as rude, or having a nasty attitude, please know that that isn't my intention. I sincerely hope you're having a better day.

-S.J.

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(18 days ago)

Welp. We're into the fourth month of the year... and this story is really lacking in the length-department. Please update. I be... Read More »

Enticement

(18 days ago)

Grr… Copying and pasting would help so much right now. --First sentence: comma after “amusement” --“fashion, accessories, being lo... Read More »